Wednesday, February 3, 2016

Thesis statement and body paragraph practice

  EXAMPLE thesis statement and first body paragraph for the prompt: "Appearance is truth."

In many cases, appearance is a critical determining factor of what is true, especially regarding employment, educational, and relational outreach, and though many may say the “real” truth lies beneath the surface, it is often appearance, alone, that is ever witnessed, and therefore, is the only “truth” a person will ever know.

               When applying for university admission, the opportunities for face to face, in-depth interaction are rare and often limited in scope. Online applications, email correspondence, and resumes are judged and critiqued with nothing else to go on but what appears before them on their computer screen or desk, and those judgments lead to decisions that could ultimately have a massive impact on a student’s life. For example, one of the most gifted students in the 2015 graduating class submitted an online application, and after it was submitted, this student realized there were several errors in both grammar and structure. Ultimately, the university was forced to base their decision on the “truth” presented to them, and the student was not accepted. It could be argued that the application wasn’t an accurate representation of that student, but the truth of the matter is, it was the only representation the student chose to give, and therefore, from the university’s standpoint, a “true” reflection.

*** This is not an example of a complete essay... just the first two paragraphs.***

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